FanFiction (18) 'Incomplete' update :) chp 5

KEEP WRITING IT KAI!!

no seriously THIS IS GREAT! XD MORE MORE <3

Mistrix636 wrote:

KEEP WRITING IT KAI!!

no seriously THIS IS GREAT! XD MORE MORE <3

You just like the DRAMA!!!! >8D

*breaks down crying in the maclabs* ... *ppl stare*
I felt bad for Max because of Ray, but then I felt terrible for Tyson when he was stood up and then just broke down when Tyson said that stuff about Max. What a horrible day! Kai better make up for it.... T_T
I loved this update! So true that if a friend is as excited about something as Tyson was, you'd agree to lie for them because you feel just how happy they are too. And you do take out your frustrations on others... especially the really fragile things, is a sad but very true fact to pick on.
YURI: yeah... I'm getting to it... I'm discovering that it's very hard to write when you aren't attracted to that sex in that way... I can write erotic scenes, but I'm at loss of their girl personalities wanting to get together to be more than friends ya know... you could help me out right?
So far I've got them meeting through Kai's gang again, but as for their continuous meetings, I've got a beach thing and then shopping, which I'm not sure I want to keep... it was a desperate attempt to get them together >< FAILING

Kiotana wrote:

*breaks down crying in the maclabs* ... *ppl stare*
I felt bad for Max because of Ray, but then I felt terrible for Tyson when he was stood up and then just broke down when Tyson said that stuff about Max. What a horrible day! Kai better make up for it.... T_T
I loved this update! So true that if a friend is as excited about something as Tyson was, you'd agree to lie for them because you feel just how happy they are too. And you do take out your frustrations on others... especially the really fragile things, is a sad but very true fact to pick on.
YURI: yeah... I'm getting to it... I'm discovering that it's very hard to write when you aren't attracted to that sex in that way... I can write erotic scenes, but I'm at loss of their girl personalities wanting to get together to be more than friends ya know... you could help me out right?
So far I've got them meeting through Kai's gang again, but as for their continuous meetings, I've got a beach thing and then shopping, which I'm not sure I want to keep... it was a desperate attempt to get them together >< FAILING

XDD Glad you enjoyed the drama!! Even if my grammer fails at life DX i didn't know if it was okay or not, my brain was turning to mush towards the end >.<//

sure i can give you some advice, but firstly, you need to explain a little how you're written there persaonlitys, just a breif description, i wouldn't wnt to give any 'out of character' ideas and have to start over cause they don't fit.

Yuki-Kiba-Chan wrote:

Kiotana wrote:

*breaks down crying in the maclabs* ... *ppl stare*
I felt bad for Max because of Ray, but then I felt terrible for Tyson when he was stood up and then just broke down when Tyson said that stuff about Max. What a horrible day! Kai better make up for it.... T_T
I loved this update! So true that if a friend is as excited about something as Tyson was, you'd agree to lie for them because you feel just how happy they are too. And you do take out your frustrations on others... especially the really fragile things, is a sad but very true fact to pick on.
YURI: yeah... I'm getting to it... I'm discovering that it's very hard to write when you aren't attracted to that sex in that way... I can write erotic scenes, but I'm at loss of their girl personalities wanting to get together to be more than friends ya know... you could help me out right?
So far I've got them meeting through Kai's gang again, but as for their continuous meetings, I've got a beach thing and then shopping, which I'm not sure I want to keep... it was a desperate attempt to get them together >< FAILING

XDD Glad you enjoyed the drama!! Even if my grammer fails at life DX i didn't know if it was okay or not, my brain was turning to mush towards the end >.<//

sure i can give you some advice, but firstly, you need to explain a little how you're written there persaonlitys, just a breif description, i wouldn't wnt to give any 'out of character' ideas and have to start over cause they don't fit.

YAY assistance! Too bad I can't surprise ya ^^'
Okay so I made Tyson (Taka) a sort of tomboy, much like her male self in attitude, confident, her lateness and eating habits of course... She's in her last year of high school with the others (Hilary, Max, Kenny and Ray) and isn't set on doing anything with her life yet when her friends keep insisting that she find something. So she's persistant and playful... and somewhat naive.
Kai is a college student, attending the same one as Hiro a block away from the high school. I haven't decided if she's studying business or something else. She has her gang of course, but doesn't look to them as friends of any kind. She uses them to get out for kicks. Her tude is about the same I guess. She lives with grandfather who insists she get married and take up the business so she gets suitors every now and then. Her best friend is Tala who visits occasionally to tease her a little. While being harsh, she's protective of herself and those she likes which happens to be Taka for some reason. XD I gave her a much more experienced point of view. I'd say she's been in a few relationships before while Taka hasn't at all.
So I started with... Taka gets attacked by her gang and Kai wards them off. So sort of saving her, Taka is grateful and curious. The problem is that I need to find something that will connect them DX I've written a few different scenarios, but I feel they just lead to nothing.
Am I clear so far? ^^'

EDIT
Okay so re-reading I see I have put a lot of issues in the story BECAUSE I don't know here it's going. I could probobly get rid of the suitor idea... Right now I keep doodling scenarios to get my head into yuri and tyka being girls...

You have to continue! It's so GOOOOOOOOOOOOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *___*

I'm so sorry i have left you guys hanging with this fic, i promise an update soon guys, gome gomen!! *shakes head in shame* >.< i am working on it